The Sacrifice of Attraction

Raymond Donnelly had always drifted through life like an observer, comfortably detached from the churn of causes and movements. He marveled at people who felt so deeply, who gave themselves to something larger, but none of it had ever seemed to tug at his own soul—until he saw her.

Frances Kelly stood at the epicenter of a protest, a beacon of passion and light. But it wasn’t her fiery words that stirred something in him. It was her hair. Long, glowing strands that moved as though alive, catching the air and the sun as if conspiring to mesmerize. It refracted the world around her, weaving through the space between them like a veil of divinity. From the moment Raymond laid eyes on her, he knew that something had shifted inside him. He was pulled into orbit by this radiance, not by her words.

Weeks passed, and the gravitational pull of Frances’s presence drew him into places he’d never imagined himself. Rallies, fundraisers, gatherings filled with zealots and believers. He stood on the edges, mouthing slogans, nodding at speeches he half-listened to, but in truth, he was always waiting for Frances. To see her hair fall across her face as she turned to greet someone. To catch the flash of golden strands in the fading light of late afternoon protests. He began to imagine her hair as some kind of force, a living thing, curling and reaching into his thoughts, pulling him deeper into this world that wasn’t his. He never questioned this attraction, this obsession, because it felt as inevitable as the moon pulling the tide.

They grew close. Too close, he sometimes thought. Frances, passionate and articulate, was everything Raymond knew he wasn’t, and she embraced him in a way that made him believe he could be. Their conversations moved from the movements in the streets to late-night talks about everything and nothing. But even as their bond deepened, he remained haunted by a silent truth: it wasn’t just Frances he was drawn to. It was her hair—the way it moved, the way it shimmered, the way it seemed to have a life all its own.

Then, one afternoon, it all changed.

Frances appeared at his door without warning, her usual warmth in her eyes, but there was something different about her. Her head, once crowned with that glorious mane, was now bare. Bald. Smooth and reflective, her scalp gleamed like an alien landscape under the overhead light. She stood in front of him, smiling, oblivious to the shift that had just occurred between them.

“I did it for charity,” she said, her voice full of joy. “We raised over ten thousand dollars. Can you believe that?”

He blinked, staring at the place where her hair should have been. The silence stretched uncomfortably between them.

“Isn’t it amazing?” she continued, stepping forward, oblivious to his discomfort. “I feel… free. Like I’ve shed something I didn’t need anymore.”

Raymond’s mouth went dry, the words he should say—I’m proud of you, you’re incredible—caught in the back of his throat. He could see her lips moving, but her words blurred as the absence of her hair became a presence of its own, overwhelming him with a sensation he couldn’t name. He nodded dumbly, muttering something that barely resembled agreement.

As the evening wore on, he struggled to feel the same connection that had once been effortless. Frances laughed and talked as if everything was normal, but to Raymond, nothing was. It was as if her hair had been some kind of tether between them, and now that it was gone, he was drifting. Every time he looked at her, he felt… nothing. The realization settled into his stomach like a cold stone.

Days passed, and Raymond found himself avoiding her calls, inventing excuses to be alone. Frances noticed, of course—she always noticed. But when she finally confronted him, it wasn’t with anger. It was with that same calm intensity that had once drawn him in.

“Ray, what’s going on? You’ve been distant.” Her voice was soft, as if she already knew the answer.

He struggled to find the words, his throat tightening. How could he tell her that it wasn’t her? That it was something so shallow, so absurd, that he could barely admit it to himself?

“I… I don’t know what to say.” He stared at his hands, unable to meet her gaze. “I thought… I thought I could handle it, but I can’t. When you had your hair, I was…” He paused, the weight of his confession growing heavier with each word. “I was so attracted to you, Frances. But now, it’s different. And I hate myself for it.”

Frances didn’t flinch. She remained still, her face expressionless as she absorbed his words. When she finally spoke, her voice was low, steady. “So, you were only ever attracted to my hair? Was that it?”

“No, it’s not just that,” he protested, though even as he said the words, he knew they rang hollow.

She shook her head slowly, more in resignation than anger. “You know, I thought you were different.”

The silence between them grew, expanding into something vast, unknowable. Raymond could feel the distance stretching, and yet he remained frozen, paralyzed by the weight of his own shallowness. He watched as Frances gathered her things, her movements deliberate and calm, like someone resigned to the inevitable. She didn’t slam the door when she left. There was no dramatic exit, no final words of fury. Only the soft click of the door latching shut, as if marking the quiet end of something fragile.

Raymond sat alone in the dim light of his apartment, the stillness around him suffocating. He had lost something. Not Frances. No, it was something deeper, something he couldn’t name. The feeling gnawed at him, hollowing him out from the inside, leaving behind a silence that echoed with questions he didn’t know how to answer.

Outside, the wind stirred. It tugged at the trees, sending leaves spiraling into the dark. It was a quiet reminder that everything, no matter how beautiful or seemingly eternal, could be swept away in an instant. And Raymond, sitting in the emptiness of his own making, could only watch as it slipped from his grasp.

7 responses to “The Sacrifice of Attraction

  1. Interesting title and the story that followed has been written very well!

    It’s sad but true about the emptiness we create as you have mentioned in the last paragraph. It’s like inertia and at times we don’t snap out of it.

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    • One of the downsides to “being human” is that we sometimes sabotage our chances at deeper connections when we let physical appearances dictate our choices and allow our own insecurities to poison the relationships we do form.

      Thank you for the read, comment and compliment, it’s very much appreciated!

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  2. I hate to admit this this but I’ve been on both sides of this issue. The young lady I was interested in didn’t shave her head completely but she got a haircut that affected the way I saw her.

    Karma clapped back a few relationships later when a woman ghosted me after a bad haircut.

    The struggle is real.

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    • Pobody’s nerfect. Sometimes we need to stumble in order to find our proper footing. Hopefully, things are working out for you relationship-wise now. Cheers for the read, the comment, and the compliment! It’s all very much appreciated!

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  3. This actually happened to me! So when I got to this part:

    “But even as their bond deepened, he remained haunted by a silent truth: it wasn’t just Frances he was drawn to. It was her hair—the way it moved, the way it shimmered, the way it seemed to have a life all its own.”

    I already knew what was about to happen. I had long, thick, black hair with sandy red tones and my boyfriend of five years (or a bit more) became less and less attracted to me when I cut it all off into a pixie short haircut.

    I had to find out pretty much the same way Frances did; slowly coaxing it out of him, knowing full well what the answer was. This dude actually said he could not understand why I didn’t ask him first. 😂😆🤣 I almost slapped the piss outta him.

    I didn’t know it then, but as I got older, I realized we would never work out, even after being together for five to six years. If someone who had claimed to love me, cherish my heart, could fall out of love with me or become less attracted to me over a haircut, he wasn’t the one for me.

    His hairline was receding before we broke up, and I was still madly in love with him because it was HIM I fell in love with, not his damn hair.

    I am TEAM FRANCES over here! Great story, Rhyan!

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    • Sorry that happened to you, and this is no consolation but better that you found out when you did than somewhere later down the line. Anyway, chin up, back straight and just keep moving forward. Some folks deserve to be left in your rearview mirror.

      Cheers, trE, for the read, the comment, and the compliment! It’s all very much appreciated!

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